I personally find this a very catchy intro. It definitely has my attention. 🙃
P0Rt1ng4Duty on
This is almost perfect, but it should say ”… thoroughly researched writing extravaganza.”
RunningPirate on
I see a tired, aggravated teacher on her 10th hour of reading dull papers seeing that openener and just being delighted at something fresh!
Invisible-Pancreas on
I think my Uni lecturer would describe that as “eye-catching” and “a strong introduction”, but would advise that the OP include a quotation with a proper Harvard APA reference included in the footnotes.
stablegeniusss on
Idk, I kinda like this intro
Annual_Host_1458 on
Honestly I wouldn’t even take points off for it, especially if the rest was good. But I would write a note along the lines of ‘Forget something before turning this in?’
Additional_Lynx7597 on
Full marks for just the start! Dont need to read the rest of it
ResponsibleBank1387 on
As a TA, when we graded papers, it was hard to read thru every page, so we didn’t. This paper I would have read completely just to be entertained.
Don’t worry too much.
Myspys_35 on
Haha I once sent in an accounting paper with a picture of a massive pickle and a moon on the front page… tired and delirious I had decided to make the whole Company A thing more interesting and give it a back story of being a pickle factory on the moon then got a bit too excited about the story line and added pictures
Addison_Dazzling on
I mean…. It does grab one’s attention.
RandomStoddard on
The perils of being a dumbass.
iangrichardson on
So, what grade did you receive?
aufrenchy on
Bot. At the time of this comment, it is 140 days old and has made one new post every day.
Also, look at the date in the paper: it’s from 2017.
gar1848 on
I would take away 2 points for the language. I would add 3 points to award its originality
SooperFunk on
Yeah, that didn’t happen 🙄
drewthless99 on
Yeah, the grammar error of not hyphenating self-hatred is cringe AF. ☠️☠️
AirFamous9093 on
Actually, depending on your professor/teacher, they might really appreciate this. My sophomore year English professor would LOVE this. Papers can be really tedious to read. This is fun and will probably be a refreshing read.
wackbirds on
It’s almost like you can type in anything you want, screen shot it, and claim you sent it to somebody! Could this happen? Absolutely. Did it happen in this case? I highly doubt it. Once the culture of “outrageous things/ events/occurences = attention” took root in the modern world, the curated “reality” of 95% of the “crazy” video and text posts you see these days became the norm.
CornBopper001 on
I think you might be onto something here! At the very least it ought to break up the monotony of what they usually have to drudge through.
doctorDiscomfort on
looks like an A+ opening to me
flexisexymaxi on
I teach at a college and I have had students submit stuff like this. As long as the voice is original and the work is solid, you have nothing to worry about. Unless you’re at a conservative or religious college, or your professor is a prude.
ConcussedAesir on
Cry fucking sounds intense
TheMuteVegan on
Omg 100%!!! I would adore the fuck out of this if I had to grade that shit;)
MirrorProphet on
Look at it this way. It won’t set off the AI sniffer?
surfdad67 on
I would love to see that intro and laugh my as off, at least a B right off the bat
DudestOfBros on
Nah bruh, that’s the best intro ever
Material_Air_2303 on
Caught my attention and now I want to read the whole 8 pages.
XYZ_Ryder on
Wheres the dissertation I want to read it
Oceanbreeze871 on
I would have given you an A for amusement
melston9380 on
For 11 years I graded papers – lots of papers and some even on this book. Personally, for a college student I’d overlook this and grade on the paper and content. For a high school student I’d probably talk to them about appropriateness, and have them rewrite the intro. Good luck, I hope you picked a good prof.
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I personally find this a very catchy intro. It definitely has my attention. 🙃
This is almost perfect, but it should say ”… thoroughly researched writing extravaganza.”
I see a tired, aggravated teacher on her 10th hour of reading dull papers seeing that openener and just being delighted at something fresh!
I think my Uni lecturer would describe that as “eye-catching” and “a strong introduction”, but would advise that the OP include a quotation with a proper Harvard APA reference included in the footnotes.
Idk, I kinda like this intro
Honestly I wouldn’t even take points off for it, especially if the rest was good. But I would write a note along the lines of ‘Forget something before turning this in?’
Full marks for just the start! Dont need to read the rest of it
As a TA, when we graded papers, it was hard to read thru every page, so we didn’t. This paper I would have read completely just to be entertained.
Don’t worry too much.
Haha I once sent in an accounting paper with a picture of a massive pickle and a moon on the front page… tired and delirious I had decided to make the whole Company A thing more interesting and give it a back story of being a pickle factory on the moon then got a bit too excited about the story line and added pictures
I mean…. It does grab one’s attention.
The perils of being a dumbass.
So, what grade did you receive?
Bot. At the time of this comment, it is 140 days old and has made one new post every day.
Also, look at the date in the paper: it’s from 2017.
I would take away 2 points for the language. I would add 3 points to award its originality
Yeah, that didn’t happen 🙄
Yeah, the grammar error of not hyphenating self-hatred is cringe AF. ☠️☠️
Actually, depending on your professor/teacher, they might really appreciate this. My sophomore year English professor would LOVE this. Papers can be really tedious to read. This is fun and will probably be a refreshing read.
It’s almost like you can type in anything you want, screen shot it, and claim you sent it to somebody! Could this happen? Absolutely. Did it happen in this case? I highly doubt it. Once the culture of “outrageous things/ events/occurences = attention” took root in the modern world, the curated “reality” of 95% of the “crazy” video and text posts you see these days became the norm.
I think you might be onto something here! At the very least it ought to break up the monotony of what they usually have to drudge through.
looks like an A+ opening to me
I teach at a college and I have had students submit stuff like this. As long as the voice is original and the work is solid, you have nothing to worry about. Unless you’re at a conservative or religious college, or your professor is a prude.
Cry fucking sounds intense
Omg 100%!!! I would adore the fuck out of this if I had to grade that shit;)
Look at it this way. It won’t set off the AI sniffer?
I would love to see that intro and laugh my as off, at least a B right off the bat
Nah bruh, that’s the best intro ever
Caught my attention and now I want to read the whole 8 pages.
Wheres the dissertation I want to read it
I would have given you an A for amusement
For 11 years I graded papers – lots of papers and some even on this book. Personally, for a college student I’d overlook this and grade on the paper and content. For a high school student I’d probably talk to them about appropriateness, and have them rewrite the intro. Good luck, I hope you picked a good prof.